I am trying to apply for 153A and am currently working on the resume. Will someone please critique what I have?

2023-11-09T08:44:57-05:00

To the U.S. Army Warrant Officer Candidate School Selection Board,

I am requesting consideration into the United States Army as a Warrant Officer specializing in rotary-wing training. I have served in the Army for nine years. One year with 2nd Infantry Division in Korea, five years supporting 1st Special Forces Group (Airborne) in Washington, and three years as a Drill Sergeant in South Carolina. With the high optempo of both Special Forces and being a Drill Sergeant, I still had the opportunity to attend college, SERE (C), Master Combatives, ESB, and more. It has been a great opportunity to not only work on myself as a leader, mentor, and person, but also increase the lethality of the force by providing my soldiers and trainees with the information I obtained from the challenging schools I have attended.
Being in the military gives me purpose, being a pilot would give me freedom. I love waking up and putting on the uniform every day. I want to continue to do so until I can no longer breathe. My interest in becoming a pilot stemmed from the "Discovery Flight" I was able to conduct. I fell in love with the atmosphere and the opportunities I can achieve outside of the Army. Being a Culinary Specialist has its perks, but doesn't have the reward, stability or purpose I am striving for; being a pilot will. As confucius said, "choose a job you love, and you won't have to work a day in your life".

Response by MAJ Private RallyPoint Member made Nov 9 at 2023 12:09 PM

2023-11-09T12:09:55-05:00

Your 3rd sentance is not a complete sentance, it is (should be) a continuaion of 2nd sentance. (By itself it wouldn't make sense.) Overall, I do think it's a good summary of your career, but I wouldn't consider it a resume (more of an essay or letter).

Response by Sgt Private RallyPoint Member made Nov 11 at 2023 10:07 PM

2023-11-11T22:07:16-05:00

SSG Private RallyPoint Member Your sentence "I love waking up and putting on the uniform every day. I want to continue to do so until I can no longer breathe." needs work. You imply that you will be in the Army until you die. How about: I love waking up and putting on the uniform every day and desire to challenge myself as a Rotary Wing Aviator. Your sentence "I fell in love with the atmosphere and the opportunities I can achieve outside of the Army." What comes to my mind is that you want to gain new skills that can be applied outside the Army. Do you really want to say that?

Response by CW5 Private RallyPoint Member made Nov 12 at 2023 7:40 AM

2023-11-12T07:40:54-05:00

Be more specific when describing your interest in Army Aviation. Know something about Army aircraft and their missions. Learn about the Aviation career tracks and profess interest in at least one track.

Response by LTC Erik Spike Thiesmeyer, Sr. made Nov 13 at 2023 7:33 PM

2023-11-13T19:33:56-05:00

SSG Lee, you certainly sound like you've earned serious consideration for selection into US Army Flight Training. I love that you are so passionate about simply being in uniform. Polish up this letter a bit as MAJ Garbarini and CW5 McCauley have suggested, add some more details about Army Aviation, what you'd like to fly -Attack, Lift, Scout, etc. and I'm sure you will succeed. Also, don't let anyone tell you "no". If someone says it cannot be done, go around them. Find another source. Check with another office. Do your own research. Don't give up! Good luck to you!