Posted on Jul 21, 2019
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**EDIT/UPDATE** I realized that I only have 2000 characters (with spaces) to communicate my desire to become an officer. That's a tall order to fit 5 paragraphs in half a page as you will see below, so I tried to condense it to 4. I hope that I conveyed everything I needed to. Let me know if this is better than my last attempt and how I could improve. Should I isolate fewer qualities and go further into depth on each or should I leave it how it is?

I want to be an officer because I have the intellect, and ability to handle responsibility under pressure; I want to be the one calling the shots and planning for the future; and I want to be the commander who earns the respect of those around him, who drives the unit to surpass the standard for each of the tasks on its METL.
Having been an NCO for over two years and looking to pin SSG in the near future, I learned how to take care of soldiers needs and conduct day to day operations, but I am capable of more than that. Being an officer involves being an intellectual who can handle a lot of responsibility and can perform under pressure. I have been humbled as an NCO and I have learned from my mistakes on how to overcome my temptation to overthink things and of my fear of delegation. I learned to break a problem down to its core and to trust in my peers and subordinates; then I evaluated their performance and identified places where training could be implemented. I feel that in that process, I have gained an insight into a commander’s thought process.
Speaking of a command mindset, I want to have the privilege of leading a group of talented and disciplined soldiers and driving my own ship. I have seen and been subjected to too many poor command decisions that are seemingly based on someone’s convenience, rather than the unit’s METL. My Joes respect me because I communicate a purpose for their efforts and in turn, they produce a lot of value in a little amount of time. If I said nothing, they feel as though I wasted their time. Therefore, if I were to commission, I will continue to exhibit strong communication so that my soldiers can work towards exceeding our METL’s standards.
Having supported Green Berets my entire career and learned that having strong leadership is paramount to a unit’s readiness. Having the intellect to accomplish the mission, and the drive to command, I want to be an officer in the United States Army to serve in the highest capacity I can.
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1LT Manager Of Customer Care
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Keep an eye on run on sentences. I would recommend running through Grammarly or a similar tool. Look out for extra commas and semicolons.
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SPC Elijah J. Henry, MBA
SPC Elijah J. Henry, MBA
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I came here to advise him to run it through Grammarly. In this case, it is definitely worth getting the paid version.
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They force you to show your ability to compose a succinct statement that progresses your personal/professional goals, why you are the right person to be selected for G2G and what you want to do after you complete your process.

It seems like a little, but it’s plenty to tell your story and make them want to select you.
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Great job, even these small four paragraphs convey all of your positive attitude and desire to be an officer. I had a similar lyrical digression when I was preparing a personal statement for admission, I added a few paragraphs about myself and my desire to succeed in this matter. But I couldn't cope without the help of this source https://www.paraphrasingserviceuk.com/ I needed to rephrase and improve grammar, as well as make my statement more unique.
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