Posted on Aug 19, 2018
SPC Kaitlyn A.
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I'm currently working on putting my packet together for OCS and I'm writing my essay on why I want to be an officer. I've spoken with my recruiter about it, but I'd just like to get some other opinions and hear about others experience regarding what should be touched on for the essay. I know that my essay and reasons will be specific to me, but I'm just interested if there's particular questions, topics, etc. that I should be covering.

Update: Obviously, this is supposed to cover why I, personally, want to be an officer and all that -- I know that. I'm used to writing essays for college or job proposals for work and you have an overarching objective for the paper, but there are also specific questions or points that are supposed to be discussed and that is what I was trying to ask about. I've written my essay so I'll post that later today for feedback before I bring it to my recruiter.

Update: Here is what I have so far for my essay. I appreciate any comments or help, thanks!

I have always admired the men and women that serve whether that is with the military or in a public service such as the police, firefighters, etc. When I was growing up, I poured over books, movies, tv shows, and news articles that chronicled the exploits of those that served, and I wanted nothing more than to be exactly like that – stand in the face of danger and still do what needed to be done in order to protect my values, country, and loved ones.

I had considered joining the military upon graduation from high school, but I wasn’t sure that I was up to the task of fulfilling and surpassing the expectations that I had come to equate with the military, so I chose to pursue my bachelor’s. I pushed through to get my degree, but it became clear towards my last year that academia and office work weren’t enough to satisfy me, and I again reconsidered the military. I was currently seeing someone that is in the US Army, so I had already been exposed to the enlisted side and I ending up moving to Colorado when he moved to Fort Carson. He helped convince me to finally pursue what I truly wanted to do and join the US Army.

I want to serve with honor and dignity and I will do whatever it takes to join the US Army even if I am unable to join as an officer at this time. I’ve heard several accounts from soldiers about life with good officers and with bad officers as well. I want to become a shining example of what it means to be a great officer: To embody honor, loyalty, respect, duty, and selfless service. While I am certainly not fresh out of college and I have experience in the workforce and life which will certainly be incredibly useful in managing efficiencies and aiding my soldiers; I know that I am extremely inexperienced and incredibly novice when it comes to the Army and I will need to rely on my senior NCOs in order to become the best officer that I can be.

To me, being a leader does not mean ordering soldiers about while I sit in an office lounging – it means working alongside my soldiers to raise us all up as a team. We either succeed together or not at all – leadership can make or break a team and without good leadership, things will crumble, and nothing will get done nor will anyone be satisfied with their job.

In conclusion, I have valuable real-life experience that I can utilize to serve the Army and help my soldiers improve, but I am well aware of my lack of knowledge in relation to the military life and will work closely with my senior NCOs to ensure our team is the best we can be. We will exemplify the values the Army lives by and make everyone proud to be a part of the US Army and an American. I will do whatever is necessary to show that I am up to the job and continue to improve my skills and knowledge so that I can serve the Army to the best of my ability. I didn’t want to join unless I was absolutely certain that I could exceed the expectations that others had and that I had set for myself because I wanted to make my team proud and do the job justice. I am confident that I will be an asset to the Army and it would be an honor and a privilege to be called an officer with the United States Army.
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Hello . I have an essay that I wrote when I wanted to put my package. My commander read it and thought it was good. I can send it to you .
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Can you send it to me as well? [login to see] thank you
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can you PM me? Thats very interesting for me
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Can you send it to me as well please?
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Hey My name is leonid
Im putting my package for ocs and I’m looking some ideas to write my essay please can you send me if you still have yours?
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SPC Kaitlyn A. Your time should be on the why and it should involve to some degree inculcating the the army values. This is the chance to tell your story, your background and motivations. God Speed!
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cant agree with you. Bad Essay!
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