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SGT Fire Support Specialist
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Throughout my military career, I have shown my superiors that I am adaptive and technically competent in my skills as a Fire Support Specialist. My work ethic and intrinsic motivation allow me to exceed expectations and lead my peers. As a Private First Class, I served in the position of a specialist, and as a specialist, I served in the position of a Sergeant while earning two Army Achievement Medals for setting a higher standard. I was selected to attend the promotion board below the zone and obtained my promotable status. As soon as I was promotable, I was entrusted with an NCO role and promoted to Corporal.

Additionally, upon graduating the Basic Leaders Course, I made the Commandant's List by recommendation from my instructors for having superior abilities to lead and communicate. Directly after being promoted to Sergeant, I filled the role of Fire Support Sergeant, a billeted Staff Sergeant position. Fire Support Sergeant is the position of a subject matter expert in all things related to fire support. I have led Soldiers into rigorous training and managed stressful situations while in this duty position, all while mentoring new field artillery officers in their first roles in the Army. I have earned two Army Commendation Medals since being in that position. I have led Soldiers at every duty position and rank by setting the standard for knowledge and work ethic. I believe that my experience of leading Soldiers and understanding and mentoring young Officers would translate nicely to a Warrant Officer career. While training in every Combat Training Center the Army offers, I have gained invaluable skills and experience. I am currently obtaining my associate degree in Applied Science with an emphasis in Education. Earning my Associates is just the first step as I want to earn my master's in education administration. Doing this will allow me to be a more well-rounded leader, as I will learn more in-depth writing skills and show my soldiers it is possible to earn your degree while being active duty. I am confident that I can better the flight community through my drive and dedication to my country. I would now like to take on another challenging role and become an Aviation Warrant Officer.

My love for aviation is what drives me towards the challenge of becoming an Army Aviator. Being an Aviator will allow me to combine my passions of serving my country and aviation. Before I joined the Military, most of my summers involved my grandfather and me working on his planes and taking them flying. During that time, he taught me that piloting an aircraft is one of the biggest challenges and responsibilities; however, there is no greater reward. Every summer, I would get to experience the reward of flying, which strengthened my appreciation and respect for it. After training with AH-64's during an Army Attack Aviation mission, I realized a more rewarding career was in reach. It was then I knew being an Army Aviator is what I am meant to do. Army Aviation is a vital part of the combined arms team and is responsible for fighting the enemy and saving fellow Soldiers' lives. Aviators must have steadfast courage, for they are risking their lives to save Soldiers in hostile situations; that kind of selfless service is why I joined the Army in the first place. Becoming an aviator is a lifelong aspiration that has entirely driven me, and I will continue to make every effort until I achieve it. It is this self-drive and motivation, along with my military experience that qualifies me to become a Warrant Officer Aviator. I am ready to take on new challenges and add to an already fulfilling career in the United States Army. When selected, I will take my invigorating passion with me every day and better the Warrant Officer cohort.
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CW2 (Join to see) - Being an Aviator will allow me to combine my passions of serving my country and aviation. While growing up, I spent most of my time watching my grandfather work on airplanes. During that time, he taught me that piloting an aircraft is one of the biggest challenges and responsibilities; however, there is no greater reward. Every summer, I would get to experience the reward of flying, which strengthened my appreciation and respect for it. After training with AH-64's during an Army Attack Aviation mission, I realized a more rewarding career was in reach. Being an Army Aviator is the ideal career for me; it would allow me to help others better. The abundance of courage aviators show in the face of adversity is what entices me to join the prestige's cohort. Becoming an aviator is a lifelong aspiration that has entirely driven me and will continue throughout my career. It is this self-drive and motivation, along with my military experience that will allow me to excel as a Warrant Officer.
I have led Soldiers into rigorous training and managed stressful situations, all while mentoring new field artillery officers in their first Army roles. I have had mentors from both the enlisted and officer sides, which has taught me a great deal about being a well-rounded leader. That experience of leading Soldiers and understanding and mentoring young Officers would translate nicely to a Warrant Officer career. I am currently obtaining my associate degree in Applied Science with an emphasis in Education, I will then continue my schooling with aspirations of earning my Masters. Doing this will allow me to be a better leader by sharpening my writing and communication skills. My young career provides me a keen opportunity to serve the Warrant Officer cohort for a significant time.
I have only been in the Army for four years, but the people I have met and the relationships that I have formed have developed me as a leader. The leaders that I have had the pleasure of working with have motivated me to be more than just a Soldier but a role model and mentor. The Soldiers that I have had the pleasure of working with are also a huge motivation for me pushing to be more, to be different, and to rise above. As a non-commissioned officer, a leader of Soldiers, I have realized that I am not only a leader but a role model, mentor, and teacher. Non-Commissioned Officers are the backbone of the Army; with this foundation, I feel I am well prepared to be successful in the next chapter of my career. I have achieved excellence at every school and duty position, and I intend to do so throughout my Warrant Officer career. When selected, I will take my passion with me every day and better the Warrant Officer cohort.
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CW2 (Join to see) - could you review my revised version in the comments?
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Thats a ROGER. SGT (Join to see)
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You're on the right track. Grammar could use a little touching up so it flows better.

For example, "Being an Aviator will allow me to combine my passions of serving my country and aviation."
The way it is worded sounds like you're serving your country and serving aviation. You're not "really" serving aviation in the same sense that you are serving your country.
"Being an Aviator will combine my passion for aviation and desire to serve my country."

"While growing up, I spent most of my time watching my grandfather work on airplanes. During that time, he taught me that piloting an aircraft is one of the biggest challenges and responsibilities; however, there is no greater reward."

"during that time" - can be omitted. You've already set the stage for when this took place- "while growing up".
"he taught me that piloting an aircraft" - You previously mentioned "work on airplanes", so it's redundant.
"He taught me that being a Pilot is one of the greatest challenges and responsibilities while also the most rewarding."

"I have led soldiers into rigorous training and managed stressful situations" - This is filler that can be removed. Everyone goes through training and handles stressful situations. Provide an example of a time you managed stress and trained soldiers to reinforce your experience as a leader instead.

Just a couple things I picked apart to give you an idea of what to look for.

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